Past Perfect Memory

green grass field
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Sometimes my dreams
take me back to my teenage days;
the place which seems
to be so much better always.
I wander through
the woods and fields, valleys and hills.
The home I knew
spreads before me again, and thrills
my heart with its
remembered peacefulness and joy.
Nothing limits
or saddens, I’m a happy boy.
The dream must end, I am back here;
somehow that always brings a tear.

– – – – – – – –

This is a combination of a Choka with an English Sonnet. Instead of having alternating lines of 5 and 7 syllables, this is alternating lines of 4 and 8 syllables to allow the lines to be iambic. The form, which I am calling a Sonnetoka, finishes with a final two 8 syllable lines. The rhyme scheme is the same as the English Sonnet: ABAB CDCD EFEF GG.

4 comments

  1. Thank you, Yassy. I play with combining forms quite often. Check out “Bright Times” and “A Time Slipped Away” for two other examples.

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