Father-Son Moment

Father-Son

Two versions of the same moment; the first is a Saturnica, the second is a Nonet.

I

“Back whens:”
Dad stands with son,
points across the river.
“See that reed near the edge? Here’s my rifle; can you hit it?”
Three shots see reed quiver,
fall, float free done.
Dad grins.

II

Dad stands with son, points across the stream.
“You see that reed? Here’s my rifle;
can you hit it?” Son shoots thrice.
Reed’s nicked, falls, floats away;
hands rifle to Dad
saying “That one?”
“Smart Aleck.”
But Dad
grins.

2 comments

  1. Thank you Sarah. This happened back in 1975 – give or take a year – during the summer between college years. The river (actually a stream, but if you say that around here people get very offended) is about 20 feet wide near our home. The banks slope up 8 to 10 feet to the rest of the land. From where we were standing it was maybe 30 feet to the water’s edge on the opposite side. My father’s rifle was a Remington with a lever action, but it had a setting to bypass the lever. I was able to squeeze off three consecutive shots without spoiling my aim. The reed shook with the first shot, fell over with second, and floated away after the third. The exchange afterward was just as I related it in the Nonet.

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