Trees II

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(Based on Trees, by Joyce Kilmer)

I hope that I shall never see
a poem written on a tree.

A tree with rhyming words imprest
in ordered lines across its breast.

A tree incised into its bark
extolling finch and meadowlark.

A tree with verse praising the thrill
of shamrock, rose, and daffodil.

A tree whose limbs shiver with pain
from those cuttings into its grain.

Though many fool with poetry,
thank God it’s not writ on a tree.

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Around 10 years ago, I first had the idea for this takeoff on Joyce Kilmer’s famous poem. What I wrote at that time, however, had almost nothing to do with the original poem. I went back to it Saturday (June 29), threw out everything except a couple of usable lines and basically started from scratch; something like building a new computer inside an old case.

7 comments

  1. Where is everybody? I hate to be the only one putting up poems, but I guess everyone else is out enjoying the summer weather. Since that’s not an option for me, I guess I’ll post enough poems for everybody.

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  2. Hi Michael,

    Sorry to have deserted…This is just a busy time of year for all my projects. I’m finding a need for more than 24 hours in a day.

    I enjoyed your response to Mr. Kilmer’s poem. It is witty and well done! I expect that he is smiling ear to ear. I know I am!

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    • Hi Michael

      The poem by Joyce Kilmer was one of my mother’s personal favorites so it always held a special significance or me. I really like your take on the original and enjoyed both the wit and the imagery. These lines, in particular, I really enjoyed and think express why a tree is a poem by itself. The tree has a soul of its own, in my modest opinion, and its sense of language.

      A tree incised into its bark
      extolling finch and meadowlark.

      A tree with verse praising the thrill
      of shamrock, rose, and daffodil.

      A tree whose limbs shiver with pain
      from those cuttings into its grain.

      Thank you for sharing
      my best
      Wendy

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  3. Thank you Sarah. You would not have liked that decade-old effort nearly so much. Putting together my poetry booklets (to anyone else reading, I have been putting new and old poems of mine into booklet format in Microsoft Word – Sarah has a copy of each of them), I have been going through my older poems. To be honest, I have run across a lot of things I had forgotten writing. This was one, and I knew I had to work on it.

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  4. Thank you Nathan. By the way, when I asked where everyone was I was referring to the other poets who usually post here at The Peaceful Pub. I am not accustomed to posting so many poems in a row without others posting theirs.

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  5. Thank you Wendy. It has always been one of my favorite poems as well; that’s why I felt it needed better treatment than I originally gave it.

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